Author's
Note: This piece is one of my responses
to the book I just finished reading called the Time Keeper by Mitch Albom.
In this story there is a man named Dor (a.k.a. Father Time), a girl
named Sarah Lemon, who wanted to end her life, and an old man named Victor
Delamonte, who wanted to live forever.
When I finished this book, I realized how important time is. In this piece about the importance of time, I
will try to use crisscrossing, reversed, antithetical, and climatic patterns. I also wanted to create a visual response to
this piece too, so I use my photography and editing skills to show you what
these moments looks like.
Time is an important
part of life -- or is it the moments that are?
To Dor, time is a way of counting the moments in a day; to Sarah, time
is the number of days she has to suffer through; to Victor, time is the amount
of life he has and deserves to live. One
question was carried throughout this story: why do we count time? There are many answers to that one question although, the answers are determined by the
kind of people who we are.
A way of counting
the moments in our lives, time is. We
praise those wonderful flashes of life that we have, yet we number the seconds
until the day ends. Time is the reason
that we don't stand still. Never do we
savor the daytime. Never do we forget
that the clocks are still running.
Although we wish, we wish for it sometimes. Anytime, for us to just forget and stop. Everyone wants to freeze time, yet we burn
away the hours by flooding our lives with errands we don't need to do. Time is what keeps life constant.
Without time, what
would our world be like? Would we wonder
what to do with that time? Would we slow
down? Would we waste that time? Time is the only thing that keeps the clocks
running, literally. We need it. For preventing us from getting off track it
is important. All of us know time is
important, but why we keep it ticking some of us don’t know. The only thing that we know is that moments
in time cannot be wasted.
I like how you have set out appropriate goals in your author's note. The syntactic devices are advanced, and admirable. There are some issues with mechanics (punctuation, capitalization) which I would like to address with you. The way in which you chose to think about the book is also admirable, and sophisticated. I do believe, however, that as your writing topics become more sophisticated, the more you may need to spend more time developing these higher level concepts. The notion of time being discussed as an entity outside of the norm, or scientific means, is rather heady. This requires more development, and that means point by point allowing yourself to explain your train of thinking to the reader. See me so we can go over this in more detail.
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